CORREZIONE DI TRADUZIONE D'INGLESE!!

[BlackAngel]

Ciao ragazzi, potreste controllare se ho tradotto correttamente in inglese "E lucevan le stelle" e "Nessun Dorma" per favore??

And the stars sparkled
and the eart was fragant...
The door of the garden creaked
She entered, fragant,
She fall herself between the (my)arms
Oh sweet kisses, oh weak caresses,
while I undress
impatiently her nice figures from veils.
Vanish forever
my love dream...
The time is gone,
an I died desperately
/
And I' ve never loved so much the life
so much the life
/

No one will sleep!!/
/
You too, O Princess,
In your cold room
watch the stars
trembling with love and hope!
But my secret is retired into my shell
No one will discover my name
No, no only on your lips,
when the daylight schines,
I will say it
And my kiss will break
The silence which makes you mine!
No one will discover her name
And we shall have to die, ahime!Die!
Depart, oh night!Set you, stars!
/ At dawn I'll win!!
/

[BlackAngel]

Grazie mille per l'aiuto!!

[Burdella]

# BlackAngel :


And the stars sparkled
and the eart was fragrant...
The door of the garden creaked
She entered, sweet-smelling,
She threw herself into my arms
Oh sweet kisses, oh weak caresses,
while I was undressing
impatiently her nice body from veils.

My love dream has vanished forever.
The time has gone,
an I am dying desperately
/
And I' ve never loved so much the life
so much the life
/


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# BlackAngel :


No one sleeps!!/
/
Neither you, O Princess.
In your cold room
you are watching the stars
which tremble with love and hope!
But my secret I'll keep for me
No one will discover(know) my name
No, no only on your lips,
when the daylight breaks,
I will tell it
And my kiss will break
The silence which makes you mine!
No one will discover(know) her name
And we shall have to die, ahime!To die!
Depart, oh night!Fade away, stars!
/ At dawn I'll win!!
/